Submit this essay for summer programs?

[Simfish]

I'm applying to 3-4 summer programs (Summer Science Program, NASA SHARP, UW Summer Academy, and maybe another). I'm thinking of attaching some of my own work - but I'm wondering if this work is impressive for a sophomore applying to a highly competitive summer science program - Should I submit it as a piece of my sample work to these programs?... (I submitted it for the DuPont Science Essay Challenge)/

Thanks for your input!

Of course, one thing is - most of the feedback I've received was "Good job, science was too difficult" or "pretty good," which is an indication that the essay wasn't too great and that the reader didn't want to hurt my feelings (although it wasn't too bad either). Hopefully, I'll get some new responses.

Essay is at...

http://simfish89.tripod.com/dupontscienceessay.doc

 

[MathStudent]

give us the essay question or prompt so we know what your objective is

 

[Moonbear]

Other than an overuse of hyphens, it is otherwise well-written. Just to clarify, when you say you're a sophomore, do you mean high school or college? If you're in high school, this would be a good example of your work if the applications require such material.

 

[Simfish]

Well - Prompt is essentially - write whatever you know about whatever topic you choose. ;)

I'm a high school sophomore. Summer progs don't require it so it much be especially good for me to submit it to them - or else I'll just be seen as trying to pile up stuff on them.

 

[Moonbear]

Well - Prompt is essentially - write whatever you know about whatever topic you choose. ;)

I'm a high school sophomore. Summer progs don't require it so it much be especially good for me to submit it to them - or else I'll just be seen as trying to pile up stuff on them.

If they don't ask for it, don't send it, unless there's a statement permitting optional supplemental material. It could hurt your chances if you don't follow the application instructions and bog them down with extra material to read.