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A small paragraph.

  1. Dec 20, 2011 #1
    Theres a little contest in my school for a short paragraph with some deep thoughts in it. I feel like its missing something. It's all about people not believing in things, even though there's obvious proof (creationists much?)

    In The End

    Time. We learn of it from the day we are born, yet we know nothing of it. It ticks on, and on, and on. But does it? They didn’t believe me, they called me a crackpot, they said I was crazy, but inside, they knew. They knew my words, the words of a meager soothsayer, spoke the truth. I was shunned by my community, thrown out. I was an outcast of society. And for what? The truth! The truth I spoke! They saw the numbers, they saw the theory, yet they wouldn’t believe it. They didn’t want to believe it! But now. Now who, who is the outcast? They are! And I’m a God, a hero, a leader of my people! And they’re dead. All dead! I didn’t kill them. They killed themselves! They didn’t believe me. Their arrogance killed them.
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  3. Dec 20, 2011 #2
    Uuh, that sounds like one of the crackpots we ban on PF every day...

    No offense :frown:
  4. Dec 20, 2011 #3

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    Wow...like Jack Handey on acid.
  5. Dec 20, 2011 #4
    Is that a good thing?
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    I put the over/under on bodies buried in your backyard at 3.5
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    Perhaps you should simply talk about the implications of a particular theory. Keep it simple, but try to go deep.
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    Going OK up to half way.

    But by the end, I was picturing the people in white coats coming up, saying "Yes, dear, now here's your tasty medicine" (then turning to your relatives saying "He's in his 'God' mood at the moment. I don't think he'll recognise you today").

    I suggest a re-write from "They didn’t want to believe it!"... Best if people don't die - they could become 'lost' or 'fade away', or something else equally 'subtle' and ambiguous.
  9. Dec 20, 2011 #8
    Okay thanks. This is for my creative writing class, and the teacher is really, erm... Picky I should say.

    Edit: Thats when I started having a writers block. Was pretty sure thats when it fell down.
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