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The Student Union
The back corner of the dining area of the new student union is an excellent place for a quick break. Such a delicious atmosphere saturated with a sense of relaxation mixed with the warm scent of pancakes, eggs, bacon and that ‘fresh cup of coffee’ smell. No one would ever guess this could be the home of a dark and sinister secret veiled by sublet pleasing aesthetics.
The comfortable seats are relaxing and help to ease your tense muscles. Letting your mind drift you start to notice sounds and noises you might not have heard otherwise. A couple of guys talk about an engineering problem. Someone flips the page of a book and slides a plate across the table. On the other side of the room, some young women are giggling. A cell phone rings, zip, “Hello.”
The seats are of cloth and pleather, still warm from the last occupant. The plastic veneer tabletop feels cold to the touch. Everything still feels fresh and new having only just been built. Warm Earth tone colors greet your appetite. Olive drab, sapphire, kaki and drab brown vertical strips on the cloth seatbacks and smooth texture on the pleather seats come together in a sublet almost unnoticed way. The only contrast to the smooth blend of pigments and grain of the seats comes from the crimson brick walls that remind you that you are still in school.
With such a tranquil atmosphere, you may never even notice that there is a rather large fireplace just in the middle of the back wall of the room. Large enough for a slightly shorter than average person to stand in, this is a truly grand fireplace. Beautiful lightly stained oak wood trim and large glass doors, this makes for a very attractive hearth. When you do finally see it, you will find the juxtaposition of the dark and red give you a melancholy feeling. The glass gives off an eerie reflection but soon bright flames will overpower any reflection. Without a fire burning, it looks like a sinister cave. Here in the middle of the Student Union it is hard to imagine place where a loathsome, gloomy and dangerous creature may lurk, but gazing into the black depths of the hearth quickly dispel such notions.
People sitting around relaxing, chatting, eating, studying or doing any of the typical things that people do in the Student Union seem hardly aware of their surroundings or the gapping maw of the fireplace. It is as if it or its secrets do not even exist.
The comfortable seats are relaxing and help to ease your tense muscles. Letting your mind drift you start to notice sounds and noises you might not have heard otherwise. A couple of guys talk about an engineering problem. Someone flips the page of a book and slides a plate across the table. On the other side of the room, some young women are giggling. A cell phone rings, zip, “Hello.”
The seats are of cloth and pleather, still warm from the last occupant. The plastic veneer tabletop feels cold to the touch. Everything still feels fresh and new having only just been built. Warm Earth tone colors greet your appetite. Olive drab, sapphire, kaki and drab brown vertical strips on the cloth seatbacks and smooth texture on the pleather seats come together in a sublet almost unnoticed way. The only contrast to the smooth blend of pigments and grain of the seats comes from the crimson brick walls that remind you that you are still in school.
With such a tranquil atmosphere, you may never even notice that there is a rather large fireplace just in the middle of the back wall of the room. Large enough for a slightly shorter than average person to stand in, this is a truly grand fireplace. Beautiful lightly stained oak wood trim and large glass doors, this makes for a very attractive hearth. When you do finally see it, you will find the juxtaposition of the dark and red give you a melancholy feeling. The glass gives off an eerie reflection but soon bright flames will overpower any reflection. Without a fire burning, it looks like a sinister cave. Here in the middle of the Student Union it is hard to imagine place where a loathsome, gloomy and dangerous creature may lurk, but gazing into the black depths of the hearth quickly dispel such notions.
People sitting around relaxing, chatting, eating, studying or doing any of the typical things that people do in the Student Union seem hardly aware of their surroundings or the gapping maw of the fireplace. It is as if it or its secrets do not even exist.
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