Five syllables haikus

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Acrid, trembling bus
doors flap open. Years later
a fat man steps off.
 
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Praise to zoobyshoe!
Such esoteric vision.
I'm going to bed.
 
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zoobyshoe said:
The roaring whisper
of a small desk fan muffles
my chattering thoughts.
Zooby, you write good
haikus! Okay, so I see
it's possible now.

(And I still write bad haikus. :yuck:)
 
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Jelfish said:
Praise to zoobyshoe!
Such esoteric vision.
I'm going to bed.
Moonbear said:
Zooby, you write good
haikus! Okay, so I see
it's possible now.
I'm still trying to imitate the subtlety of this one:

hypnagogue said:
puddles glisten streets
leaves downcast, eyes following
a stranger walks past
I think Hyp's is the only really Japanese level entry.
 
  • #30
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mattmns said:
Poetry is crap!
It really really is, so
why bother with it?
because if you can
appreciate it, it is
truly good writing
 
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Two I liked from the site I linked to:


I kill an ant
and realize my three children
have been watching.

-Kato, Shuson


First Autumn morning:
the mirror I stare into
shows my father's face

-Kito, Murukami
 
  • #32
At sometime in my past I remember being told that one of the most special, or something like that,(Butthead moment, pardon me) Haikus was the single word "Tundra". I ggld it and Lo-and-Behold, a website about Haikus named "Tundra" gets first dibs. Now I'm going to go crazy trying to remember where I remember that from. I still can't believe they took Beavis & Butthead off MTV.

...in memorium...

I'm corn-HO-lio
Must have Capucino now
Beavis is a Dork
 
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He harvests the corn
As he watches the dust rise
From the neighbor's field.

Is that better? :biggrin:
 
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Moonbear - I picture an old man staring at desolation and thinking, "ha-ha!"

I thought I had it,
The perfect joke to impress.
Now, akward silence..
 
  • #35
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haikus really suck
japanese poetry, should
not be read. burn it.
 
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yomamma said:
haikus really suck
japanese poetry, should
not be read. burn it.
Haiku's it! Really!
Burn suck-read, Japanese be!
Poetry! not should...
 
  • #37
why are you confused?
...your dad on a pogo stick...
don't you get it yet?
 
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bookside candelight
penumbras on the poet's face
blackened fly husks
 
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Steely Dan sounds "off".
Wide spreading body-packed beach.
DJ says its Sting.
 
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Waves whispering roar
surfer flicks wet sand hair head,
he's pee'd in his suit.
 
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Surf pulls surfer up.
Swells throw sun glints on a babe.
Baby bites frisbee.
 
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The vast barefoot beach
trods rotting knots of seaweed
and little flies swarm
 
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zoobyshoe!

:rofl: I enjoy your haiku punchlines.
 
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midnight now, can't sleep
make-up smeared eyes glint at me.
clown at my window.
 
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Jelfish said:
:rofl: I enjoy your haiku punchlines.
Can't take credit. I plagiarized that from a beach T-Shirt: I pee in my wet suit.
 
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Math Is Hard said:
midnight now, can't sleep
make-up smeared eyes glint at me.
clown at my window.
Greaspaint prints on glass,
red sponge nose pressed flat on glass?
Baseball bat should work.
 
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zoobyshoe said:
Greaspaint prints on glass,
Red sponge nose pressed flat on glass,
Baseball bat should work.
:rofl: :rofl: :rofl:
zoob, I'm laughing so hard it hurts.
:rofl: :rofl: :rofl:
ooh, man, I hope Hypatia doesn't come in here. :tongue2:
 
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gentle hands tremble
through ephemeral sands
eternal tides thunder
 
  • #49
bob no like haiku.
haiku is for cool kids.
bob is not that cool.
 
  • #50
I am Jack's colon.
I get cancer; I kill Jack.
Haiku from Fight Club
 

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