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Sentence on dark matter

  1. Jun 20, 2014 #1
    Hey, guys. I'm writing a science fiction novel and would like to know if you guys think there's anything wrong with the grammar in this sentence:

    "Space-time tunnels required large amounts of dark matter to stay open, and they could not be closed during the course of the mission, for it took even more of the precious material to create them from scratch."

    Sounds okay to me. But is it?

    Thanks in advance!
     
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  3. Jun 20, 2014 #2

    phinds

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    Grammatically, it's a completely correct structure, but the "for" makes it sound pretentious and of course scientifically it sounds ridiculous since dark matter doesn't interact with anything so getting large amounts of it in one place would be impossible as far as we currently know.
     
  4. Jun 20, 2014 #3

    Thanks a lot for the feedback, phinds!

    I'll just ascribe that idea to the "fiction" part of "science fiction". After all, scientific knowledge is always "as far as we know". :)
     
  5. Jun 20, 2014 #4

    Evo

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    What Phinds is saying is *NO*, it's not right.
     
  6. Jun 20, 2014 #5
    No, Evo, he said it's grammatically correct. Scientifically sketchy.
     
  7. Jun 20, 2014 #6

    phinds

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    Grammatically, yes. "Sketchy" no. "Ridiculous" does not equal "sketchy"
     
  8. Jun 21, 2014 #7

    Evo

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    This thread is done.
     
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