Critique My HR Documents: An Honest Strangers Opinion

[gravenewworld]

I really need to hit a HR with these. Would anyone be willing to critique them for me? I feel like a complete stranger would give me the most honest feedback rather than my friends or co-workers since they may be afraid that they would offend me.

 

[cristo]

Let's start this thread again, shall we, writing in English and responding only if you have a useful comment for the OP.