Can u understand my business coursework?

[Aaron792]

Following are my business courcework involving some linear algebra?
Have i stated my idea clearly?

 

[Pere Callahan]

As for me, I have no idea what you're talking about in that text.

 

[Aaron792]

Thanks!
This is about a topic of business decision-making problem (DMP) in the Analytic Hierarchy Process(AHP). DM in the text refers to Decision Maker.
As understanding it requires some background knowledge about AHP, I understand u can't figure them all out. Sigh...

How about u think about the sentence "The second consequence is often more attention-calling cause tiredness and impatience often effect the correctness of DM's decisions especially when they are under pressure" in a literal view forgetting the logic?

I try to change it with "The fatigue eduction draws more attention in that it affects the accuratcy of DM's judgments especially in case that DM bears working pressure."

Which do u think is more understandable?
Thanks for your opinion~