Unusual request re: Matter and Dark matter and song lyrics

[Matias]

Summary:: I've written a song based on a lecture I attended re: the universe. I'm hoping to confirm facts re: Dark Matter, etc. discussed within the song.

I have a somewhat unusual request:

I have written a song based on a lecture I attended re: the universe. Before recording and releasing it, I'm hoping to confirm facts discussed within the song ( i.e., re: Dark Matter) and looking to edit the lyrics if there are inaccuracies. I realize some statements could work metaphorically; however, I'm interested to the degree that the text can be accurate beyond metaphor.

Please let me know your thoughts! TIA.
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A telescope is a time machine

The more powerful it is

The further back our gaze can reach

Far into the past

Light years away

In order to understand

Perhaps how this universe began

How it used to be
Perhaps before this universe began

What used to be?
If we filtered out the light (somehow)

All the matter beaming light (somehow)

What would be left behind?

I appreciate you,

dark matter inside, between us and far away

For helping us keep our shapes

For helping us form in space

For helping us be in space

Helping the elements of the universe

Keep shape

In space

Outer and inner space tooIf we filtered out the dark (somehow)

All the matter that is dark (somehow)

What would be left behind?

I appreciate you,

Matter inside, between us and far away

For mattering here in place.

Creating the elements of the universe in space.

Space.

Outer and inner space too

 

[jim mcnamara]

I'm letting this go from moderation. Fair warning if this thread goes poorly it will be history. And I'm not sure what forum is a good fit. Any problems please report them.

 

[Matias]

I'm sorry if I've posted in an incorrect place. If so, if anyone has suggestions as to where I may find assistance re: this matter, please let me know. I realize this might not be everyone's cup of tea. The first paragraph is not my idea. Rather, I'm paraphrasing.

 

[rsk]

If Ed Sheeran can get away with 'push and pull like a magnet do' I'm sure your lyrics will do.

 

[Matias]

Thank you for your reply and apologies for not having replied earlier. I'm no William Blake but at the very least I want to confirm the information is factual, (alternate theories re: dark matter not withstanding).

 

[Hornbein]

It gets my cosmological seal of approval. It's good poetry too.

 

[Matias]

Thank you, Hornbein!