So I was wandering around the Internet and came across this http://careers.stackoverflow.com/domenicdenicola [Broken] It's not a personal statement for graduate school, but it still inspired me mostly because of the strong enthusiasm it contained (including use of the word "awesome" and an exclamation mark). Most personal statements I've seen contain far less enthusiasm than his. Of course, his personal statement must be evaluated in its context - since most jobs tend to have extremely low acceptance rates, so standing out in a job application is a lot more important than standing out in a graduate school application. Could there be any "negative" effect from this enthusiasm, were it applied to a grad school application? Strong enthusiasm could potentially reveal immaturity or narcissism, and many people of the current generation do complain of the narcissism of this incoming generation.