Check Paper: Describe Apparatus, Sensor, Data, Physics, Writing

[BiGyElLoWhAt]

I was wondering if anyone wanted to check a paper for me, it's only about 2 pages long worth of actual paper, plus a couple pages of figures. I have to turn it in today (in about an hour), and was wondering how well people think I met the criteria listed below before turning it in. I know I'm missing the data, so don't worry about #3.
Thanks in advance.

Homework Statement

Here's the criteria:
1) Describe your apparatus and how it works.

2) Describe how the sensor works.

3) Show your data, provide some analysis - There is temperature dependence in a single location on time, and then there is the propagation across the whole bar, etc.

4) What is the physics of the situation.

5) be careful on your writing. You should not be turning in a first draft.

Homework Equations

The Attempt at a Solution

See attached.

 

[Dr. Courtney]

In the future, you're going to need to give us more time for the feedback you want.

 

[BiGyElLoWhAt]

Yea, I know, I was trying to get someone in real life to check it, but no one could/would, so it was a last minute decision to toss it up.