I need feedback on a story I wrote

[jaramsli]

I am really a programmer, so my writing skills are limited.
However, friends encouraged me, and I wrote http://tpsme1.blogspot.com, but can't seem to get any feedback.

Any feedback will be appreciated and favor will be returned.

A humble newbie

Jan Atle Ramsli

 

[chasrob]

Have you tried any of the many online critique workshops? One of the best, I think, is http://www.critiquecircle.com/default.asp.

You have to critique others to have your own looked at, but they make it easy with their in-line templates.

Another good one online is Critters.

 

[jaramsli]

Thanks!

 

[Drakkith]

I was going to critique it, but when I read it, I had no idea what I was looking at. I'm not a poetry or lyrical kind of guy, sorry.

 

[jaramsli]

I was going to critique it, but when I read it, I had no idea what I was looking at. I'm not a poetry or lyrical kind of guy, sorry.

Thanks!
You just did!

That simply means that it sucks :)

I'm on rewrite two now :)