Testing Have technologies that made our lives easier necessarily made our lives better?

[^_^physicist]

a writing style that most intelligent and literate people (that is, seniors in technical degrees or above; most of us on this forum) find cumbersome is unnecessary and actually obstructs your goal of communicating noteworthy information.

Ahh but this is where you are split. CP's style, is not directed towards you for a reason. It is directed towards those studying and manipulating texts in the realm of the humanities, with the aid of histo-contextual tools; which include rhetoric. Granted, for an essay, the introduction was obscure, and I say this because it follows the dreaded "upside down pyramid," which is a big no-no; however, due to the topic he is addressing the non-standard method is a viable choice, as the constuction adds even more to his development of his arguement.

(@CP: I too enjoy the humanities from time to time).

 

[^_^physicist]

It was stated eariler that werg22 can't do a damn thing about the SAT's. Well that isn't entirely correct. Other activities, high grades within school, and a strong ablity to control the English language will all reflect higher than SAT's (at least in my experance) for admission to college. Granted, I am biased towards the SAT, as I did quite poorly compared to my projected (and expected) scores (I was expected by all accounts to get within 30 Points of a perfect, which at the time was a 1600, my score, a 1130) the 4 years ago that I took the test. But yet, I managed to get accepted to all of the colleges I applied to.

So needless to say, the SAT isn't all that important. So Werg, don't worry about your score if it isn't perfect, heck even if you think its poor. The schools you apply to are going to look at more than if you could right a damn SAT essay.

Just wanted to throw in my two cents.

(PS. Your essays weren't bad, consitering that you only had 25 minutes; however, at times the flow/connection between paragraphs was poor).

 

[danny411]

In response to the first 4 by werg

pretty good writing specially for 25 mins...good examples from life...makes it easier..

I noticed that you have no rebuttals? why ? is that a strategy of yours? I mean the length is short so its hard to do ?

1)tech is good. But has it made life better ? Some people think it hasn't.It increases our dependency on it.

2)what motivates people to change? yep i agree there is a catalyst that prompts most people to want to change. I had a criminal record and it messed things up for a long time.Why did i want to change ? Not confrontation with other people. My friends all died. This is why i wanted to change. I didn't want to end up like them.

3)the door to success is labelled push. Yes i agree that you have to be proactive. I think this is what the prompt is talking about. You have to go out there and open doors by being proactive. Most people don't have no lineage or pathways to success so they got to forge them.

4) Loss teaches us more
yes, we reflect on losses to change things, this is what allows us to progress forward. If you always did things correct there would be no need to change things so you would continue to do them the same way. But if you get a crappy mark then you will look at the reason why and never let it happen again.

Pretty good writing. Not really academic enough though. If you get a prompt about the dangers of medical treatment don't use frankenstein. That's ficational(made up). Use real examples such as the eugenics movement, witch hunting, prisoners abuse(labotomy, shock treatment, coerced used of experimental procedures), abuse in mental institutions( shock treatment, hypothalmic stimulation, hypocampus removal, sterilization, forced confinement, force drug treatment)maybe even medical malpractice stuff if you know it.

Overall, good writing under the circumstances. I think when i do mine i will have to scale back from abstract metaphysical arguments--

should i use a rebuttal?